Comments for UNM-English 220 http://avelarde.wordpress.com Just another WordPress.com weblog Mon, 12 May 2008 01:18:02 +0000 http://wordpress.com/ hourly 1 Comment on Are You Really Eating “Fresh”? by dsrtrosy http://avelarde.wordpress.com/2008/04/16/are-you-really-eating-fresh/#comment-8 dsrtrosy Mon, 12 May 2008 01:18:02 +0000 http://avelarde.wordpress.com/?p=25#comment-8 You have some really outstanding posts here. I hope I may have permission to use them as sample blogs next semester. --Sarah-- You have some really outstanding posts here. I hope I may have permission to use them as sample blogs next semester. –Sarah–

]]> Comment on Above the Influence by english220 http://avelarde.wordpress.com/2008/04/03/22/#comment-6 english220 Sat, 05 Apr 2008 02:22:11 +0000 http://avelarde.wordpress.com/2008/04/03/22/#comment-6 Your iPod analysis is pretty good, but for many of these you are falling into a trap I want you to avoid in your final project: spending more time telling the reader about the ad (which, on the blog, they can watch for themselves) and less time analyzing. It's fine to tear an ad apart bit by bit and apply the ideas from class. Just try to put more emphasis on your ideas and the class notes than on a rehash of the specifics. Your iPod analysis is pretty good, but for many of these you are falling into a trap I want you to avoid in your final project: spending more time telling the reader about the ad (which, on the blog, they can watch for themselves) and less time analyzing. It’s fine to tear an ad apart bit by bit and apply the ideas from class. Just try to put more emphasis on your ideas and the class notes than on a rehash of the specifics.

]]> Comment on Double Blubber It by english220 http://avelarde.wordpress.com/2008/02/06/double-blubber-it/#comment-3 english220 Mon, 11 Feb 2008 05:15:16 +0000 http://avelarde.wordpress.com/?p=4#comment-3 Nice! You have started out with a great, publishable voice, you have drawn the audience right in, and you've hit it--these ads are persuasive. Way to get on the ball! The title is great, the ad choice is great and the length is just about perfect for a blog. If I can make one recommendation for the course of the journal it would be to vary where you place the visual of the ad itself. Some weeks you may want to lead up to it, other weeks start with it and sometimes you may want to place it at the end. --Sarah-- Nice! You have started out with a great, publishable voice, you have drawn the audience right in, and you’ve hit it–these ads are persuasive. Way to get on the ball! The title is great, the ad choice is great and the length is just about perfect for a blog.

If I can make one recommendation for the course of the journal it would be to vary where you place the visual of the ad itself. Some weeks you may want to lead up to it, other weeks start with it and sometimes you may want to place it at the end.

–Sarah–

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